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PBS 126 - Please Just by ~sihnstarr:iconsihnstarr:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Dark




a taste of the corrosive
always makes me weep
a simple gentle explosive
tears apart this freak

please just let me hold you
please just let me have you
please just let me touch you
one more time
one more little time

am i all that you expected?
am i all that you hate?
will you ever stop to kiss me?
or are you just too late?

please just let me hold you
please just let me have you
please just let me touch you
one more time
one more little time

here you are inside my dreams
always there, or so it seems
just break those ties that bind
make the two one, one of a kind

please just let me hold you
please just let me have you
please just let me touch you
one more time
one more little time

before we die...
©2003-2009 ~sihnstarr
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we all have our little wishes...

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~hybrid-soul Jan 30, 2003, 9:36:13 PM
you'd be surprised how perfect this is for how I'm feeling right now. I commend you man, you really know how to write... i also envy you though... I could never be as eloquent as you... very touching piece. I love it.

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____-//+__'my' graphics
:icontaintedeternity:
~taintedeternity Jan 30, 2003, 9:39:17 PM
your words inspire...ive known lots of times when i felt like this...i guess right now in a way i dont feel this way....but maybe i do....Confused

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what i was and what i am will always be different then what i will become.
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`devildoll Jan 30, 2003, 11:31:04 PM
Once again, that is beautifuly written!

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:bulletpurple: My Stock Account :pointr: *AshenSorrow
:bulletpurple: My Hubbys Account :pointr: =silentfuneral
:bulletpurple: My Daughters Account :pointr: *MisssBarbie

"Death is the Graduation of the Soul" ~ Sylvia Browne
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~dreamheaven Jan 31, 2003, 5:29:51 AM
Nice work, some great imagery scattered throughout the piece :) (Smile)
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~tinder Jan 31, 2003, 10:41:46 AM
Been in this place in a different way, before voice became flesh. When it was just a dream.
You will find her, of this i am sure. I wish all the little peices of her in other people would be enough, but I know itn ever would be enough, and I wouldn't expect it to be.

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Haemoglobin is the key to healthy heart-beat.
:iconjaymill:
~jaymill Jan 31, 2003, 4:33:15 PM
This is a really good poem. It has really good descrition of how you feel. The only little thing that I didn't personally like is the repition of let me.... However, its a very good poem

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could never think of a good one
:iconlittledeer:
~littledeer Feb 1, 2003, 9:55:24 AM
prayer like

*sighs*

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There are no happy endings, because nothing.. ever ends...
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~stormclouds Feb 1, 2003, 3:29:35 PM
please just let me hold you
please just let me have you
please just let me touch you
one more time
one more little time


This should be a song, if it isn't one in progress already. Just one more little time...yes. Hug


~Emm Horns
:iconladynyk:
~ladynyk Feb 6, 2003, 7:32:10 AM
no one wants to wait another forever.. *sigh*

hauntingly beautiful..

--
Nyk

Check out ~ekg His words weave the mundane into magick..
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Member of ~dark-writing

\"I Tell You: One must still have chaos in one to give birth to a dancing star!\" ~ Nietzsche
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